To speak honestly there are 100s of things that could be fixed, improved, blah-blah-blah. But at the end of the day, you need to understand that it’s not only up to you why your music is not taken somewhere. There are so many little chaotic things happening that you just CAN’T control. So don’t pay attention to, that a library didn’t take your music, because what I hear in your music is that it could be easily played in a commercial that would, later on, pay you tens of thousands of dollars for that.
Yes, the mix is weak. Yes, the sounds are poor. Yes, it’s hard when someone you don’t know tells you that. But the most important thing for you is not taking it too personal, instead, taking a reference track that you try to imitate and if you are not “death”, you try to get the same sound. That can’t be taught in a course or even here with some words and sentences. The “death” sentence sounded a little bit weird, but I just don’t know how to explain it in a better way I hope you still understand.
Believe me, I heard some very similar music, like yours, and I think many of us as well, in some commercials that generate thousands of dollars in revenue. So it doesn’t need to stop you asking yourself too many questions…why, why, why…try to put your track in other libraries. Audiosparx is another option. They love this kind of music that you do. Try it. If that doesn’t work, then approach another library. And then another, until you get a response that is positive. Again, it’s not only up to you…it’s often a combination of many, many little things that you can’t understand.
Just one example: One A&R didn’t respond because he had a fight with his wife the morning before. So out of 100 tracks that were sent to him, he just said: “Sorry, everything is crap! I have a BAD day!”
It’s just fictional, but again, people are on the other side and they have a reason why. It’s not only quality or sync-ability. @Geoffers I agree that the chances are bigger to get a potential sync, BUT let’s be honest…how many Youtube commercials from big brands have you seen with just ending the track by a “fade-out”…my guess…90%!!!
The last advice I would give to you is by learning more about how to mix…how can you make your amazing music sound clear, balanced, emotional, focused, etc…you can’t learn it overnight…but with time and effort you will get better and understand more.
PS: If you want coaching and you are able to invest, we can talk in private. I have a coaching program that is exactly about your case. You can apply for a course too. But it will take you much longer with maybe not the result you want. Oh, no, have I just advertised myself? A no-go. Buh. Is advertising even allowed here? No, but seriously, joked to the side, there were already some people asking, and I can talk for hours what you can do to improve your sound, but I don’t have the time physically to write all of it AND it will not help you as I want to…as you will be overwhelmed.
I think that @Geoffers already said the important things…clarity, instrumentation, sound choice (library), no breaks, you don’t use automation (dynamics), stereo-field, balance… BUT I like the musical idea definitely. It really has a lot of potentials if made the way most publishers want it.
To your success,